One Stop Poetry Challenge
Thanks to Sean McCormick
Thanks to Sean McCormick
Under spinning stars,
6 miles from town,
Waiting
Polished Bass weegins,
Madras Gant shirt,
Silver flask
Moon light dances,
With Agastache cana,
Hummmingbirds excitement
Stomach butterflies,
Palms sweat,
Anticipation mounts
Distant dust,
Blaring radio brings,
Farmer’s Daughter
6 miles from town,
Waiting
Polished Bass weegins,
Madras Gant shirt,
Silver flask
Moon light dances,
With Agastache cana,
Hummmingbirds excitement
Stomach butterflies,
Palms sweat,
Anticipation mounts
Distant dust,
Blaring radio brings,
Farmer’s Daughter
8 comments:
Excellent build of anticipation through relatively brief lines and felt detail.
Ah, the tension, the anticipation! Really great build and reveal!
...or farmer's son with his ham fists, to warn you off of his sis. ;-)
Loving the hummingbirds and agastache, so ethereal compared to the physical tension and lust. Nice.
haha well worth the wait...smiles.
And I'm taken down another road entirely and I too, experience the anticipation through your words. I've been having a blast seeing all the different takes this photo has inspired. Great write!
This is a great little piece Bill. Last two lines nail it again...oh for the love of a farmgirl ;)
perfect!
enjoyed this very much. love the building up of anticipation
thank you
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