Sunday, February 6, 2011

Blue Night

Under spinning stars,
6 miles from town,
 Waiting
Polished Bass weegins,
Madras Gant shirt,
Silver flask
Moon light dances,
With Agastache cana,
Hummmingbirds excitement
Stomach butterflies,
Palms sweat,
Anticipation mounts
Distant dust,
Blaring radio brings,
Farmer’s Daughter

8 comments:

dustus said...

Excellent build of anticipation through relatively brief lines and felt detail.

Ami Mattison said...

Ah, the tension, the anticipation! Really great build and reveal!

Fireblossom said...

...or farmer's son with his ham fists, to warn you off of his sis. ;-)

hedgewitch said...

Loving the hummingbirds and agastache, so ethereal compared to the physical tension and lust. Nice.

Brian Miller said...

haha well worth the wait...smiles.

Natasha said...

And I'm taken down another road entirely and I too, experience the anticipation through your words. I've been having a blast seeing all the different takes this photo has inspired. Great write!

repressedsoul said...

This is a great little piece Bill. Last two lines nail it again...oh for the love of a farmgirl ;)

Hope said...

perfect!
enjoyed this very much. love the building up of anticipation

thank you